Dinny and Dr. ARM's Sketchbook

Dinny wrote:

Argent Fang wrote:Who published it? Maybe I can track down a copy just to say that I have one.

xD I will never tell you who published it! Ever. I don't want anyone to see this pile of crap. I'll tell you when I publish something good.

To answer your question, it was a small independent press located here in South Australia, so yeah. Not that hard. I had about 20 copies printed, two are mine, the rest belong to friends and teachers, one of them is ashamedly enough at my local library. The manuscript and everything are still up on the site and it's kind of an "on demand" thing where you click and they print and send you a copy.

But like I said, when I write something worthy of buying, I'll tell you.

If you're curious about my writing, try here. It's still not the best, but it's about 70% there. This isn't my usual style: I'm not really a fan of first-person limited perspective, but when I write it, for some reason it always comes out really emotive. If you aren't familiar with Death Note, the main character of this piece is Mello, who is basically a boy genius (though not to the standard of L/Near), so it's interesting trying to get into his headspace and try to write as he would think: impulsive and emotional, very perceptive, and obviously with high-brow language.

I'm going to try to do another fanfiction for Mermaid Melody done in first person, but I've been putting it off for a year. The character I want to write from the perspective of is a very dumb, airheaded, fourteen-year-old-girl. That's a massive challenge for me, because it's hard to think about what someone like that would/wouldn't realize, how they'd react to things, etc. Dr. ARM gave me some pretty helpful advice and said that I should just write using very basic thought patterns. I really want to try when I feel more confident.

Dinny wrote:If you're curious about my writing, try here. It's still not the best, but it's about 70% there. This isn't my usual style: I'm not really a fan of first-person limited perspective, but when I write it, for some reason it always comes out really emotive. If you aren't familiar with Death Note, the main character of this piece is Mello, who is basically a boy genius (though not to the standard of L/Near), so it's interesting trying to get into his headspace and try to write as he would think: impulsive and emotional, very perceptive, and obviously with high-brow language,

StarFireSong wrote:

Dinny wrote:If you're curious about my writing, try here. It's still not the best, but it's about 70% there. This isn't my usual style: I'm not really a fan of first-person limited perspective, but when I write it, for some reason it always comes out really emotive. If you aren't familiar with Death Note, the main character of this piece is Mello, who is basically a boy genius (though not to the standard of L/Near), so it's interesting trying to get into his headspace and try to write as he would think: impulsive and emotional, very perceptive, and obviously with high-brow language,

Dinny, I read your fanfic & thought it was really great. I've always been a fan of first person, simply because I like seeing how a character thinks & feels. If it's done right (à la Jodi Picoult, whom I absolutely love), you get to really understand & sympathize/empathize with each character by the time you close the book. I loved how you wrote it; it really sucked me in. I noticed a few errors here & there though, lol, but nothing major ("it's" in place of "its", & capitalization errors when a character's speaking).

For the 14 year old girl thought processes: In some movies, the sidekicks of the heroes are dummies. Have you thought about borrowing from them? (Watching a movie with nearly no plot--"Dumb & Dumber" comes to mind--would probably help you too.) Just a thought.

StarFireSong wrote:I noticed a few errors here & there though, lol, but nothing major ("it's" in place of "its",

StarFireSong wrote:& capitalization errors when a character's speaking).

StarFireSong wrote:For the 14 year old girl thought processes: In some movies, the sidekicks of the heroes are dummies. Have you thought about borrowing from them? (Watching a movie with nearly no plot--"Dumb & Dumber" comes to mind--would probably help you too.) Just a thought.

Argent Fang wrote:Will Ferrell movies are also a great source of stupid character dialogue; no one pulls off stupid quite like him.

Dinny wrote:

StarFireSong wrote:& capitalization errors when a character's speaking).

This one you're going to have to point out to me. I just combed back over the piece and all I can identify is capitals after an ellipsis (I don't know if that's proper), and occasionally capitalization in a broken sentence (i.e. "The point is," Near quickly interjected, "It all leads to an interesting thought.").

Dinny wrote:"Hey Near, I need to ask you something important."

Dinny wrote:" 'Human Traffic'? What do you mean?" I pressed. In hindsight, I'm surprised that I didn't walk out there and then.

Dinny wrote:"Seriously Near, what the hell—"

lilith wrote:Nice... I like how his eyes pop out of his hair. =P